What do you think of this character.....?

Whatever everybody else is saying I think they are wrong. First of all this is fantasy so YOU the author can make it how YOU want to. If Twilight did something different so what? I think that having a half vampire is cool but I'm going to have to say is watch out for your readers because Twilight is a big hit and when they see your story they are probably going to think that you don't know what you are talking about... I think you should change the part where her "parents" abuse her and probably say they �ignore her or keep her in the cellar or something you know? And lastly I think you should say the girl has a tan because most hunters have a tan and are kind of dark from working outside where as vampires are milky smooth. I know you are trying to say she looks like a vampire but I think if you include that characteristics it will be better but this is your story and this is just my suggestion. I hope it goes well and when it get finished I would love a copy and read it!